Please take a look at my drafted resume and tell me what you think.
Experiences
Internship
Naval Air Station Lake Hurst NJ
Information & Technology / Help Desk 2013 Dec - 2014 Jan
Managed customer service inquiries, troubleshot hardware & software solutions.
Analyzed Excel data for senior tech.
Provided technical support.
Managed distribution of computer equipment & replaced faulty equipment.
Internship
Naval Air Station Lake Hurst NJ
Production controller / customer support 2013 Aug - 2013 Dec
Managed customer relations & helped facilitated request for calibration.
Created Excel electronic format for calibration request forms in order to facilitate and minimize erroneous request.
Used METPRO and MEASURE to data entry.
Kept record of all calibrated equipment as, well as storage inventory by utilizing MS Excel.
Responsible for Logistics of calibrated equipment.
Coordinated with outsources to calibrate equipment we had no capabilities for.
Tracked all calibrated equipment and outsourced equipment via MEASURE and Excel spread sheets.
Inspected with attention to detail every item when brought in for calibration and after calibration.
Production Recruiter
Recruiting Station New Jersey
Recruiting Sub-Station Jersey City. 2009 Jun – 2012 Aug
Networked with local school and businesses nearby to create good working relationship.
Marketed schools and universities to attract potential applicants.
Took leadership role to ensure success of applicants at recruit training.
Supervised and trained new recruiters in marketing and sales.
Trained and evaluated new recruiters.
Created automatically computing spread sheet to help compile monthly recruiting statistics.
Assistant Training Chief
3rd Marine Division, Okinawa Japan.
Operations 2006 May -2009 Jun
Coordinated and supervised with worldwide commands to ensure the readiness of deployment overseas.
Networked with different worldwide specialized training.
Created electronic school request forms in order to disseminate to all major command elements.
Created and maintained Shared Point website.
Vehicle Commander / Squad Leader
3rd Battalion 6th Marines.
Camp Lejeune, NC 2003 Sept - 2006 May
Responsible for the accountability, training, physical conditioning, morale and welfare of 12 Twelve Marines while deployed to Afghanistan and Iraq in support of Operation Enduring Freedom and Iraqi Freedom.
Trained Marines on Infantry squad Tactics, Techniques and Procedures.
Trained and mentored Marines.
Trained with civilian Police forces on security procedures
Conducted multiple combat operations in Iraq and Afghanistan, while participating in Operation Enduring Freedom and Iraqi Freedom, fulfilled billets from Team leader, Squad leader and while on Personal Security detail Vehicle Commander. Conducted high risk personnel security and monitored authorized entrance and departure points
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When I used to get stacks of resumes, I really wanted to see bold headings to identify different sections. When you first get them, you want to pull out the ones that are clear, concise and professional looking. And I really agree with Ray on language, especially if you are applying to a certain type of job. I will change my resume to reflect educational or social service depending on the position for which I'm applying. Similarly, when I look at applicants for a job where presentation or supervision are required, I look for key words that fit those skill sets.
Ray and Craig thank you for your input. Craig please provide a good email to send you the drafted resume.
Not good enough. White space is a important part of a resume. Send it my way, and I'll take a look if you want.
Good Morning Felix,
It is a bit hard to read this outline. I understand this is a draft, but keep in mind that when you create a resume you want to be sure it looks like someone would want to read it. A delicate balance between too many & not enough words & information.
Also a critical point of career searching & applying for roles is to incorporate the language listed in the job description you are targeting. Most if not all online sites use key word searches; if you don't have them you don't get looked at by a human. For example if you use "lead a group of 12" and the required competency lists "directed 12 employees" you may not get overlooked.
I would suggest you make a cleaner list of roles and dates. For example:
Naval Air Station Lake Hurst NJ Information & Technology / Help Desk Dec 2013 - Current
{bullet points}
Naval Air Station Lake Hurst NJ Production controller / customer support Aug - Dec 2013{bullet points}
Recruiting Station Jersey City, NJ Jun 2009 – Aug 2012
{bullet points}
Etc.
A great tool to help you list and translate the responsibilities and relative competencies from military to civilian language is the ACE Guide. You can search by both the courses (MCI's &/or resident schools) or occupations. I list the link below. If looking at the MOS check the 0369 & 0372 and remove the portions that don't apply to your pay grade.
http://www.acenet.edu/news-room/Pages/Military-Guide-Online.aspx
Also you should start to network professionally if you have not already done so. There are a LOT of free sites like this that you can professionally connect with former Marines and perhaps organizations you want to target for employment.
Try LinkedIn. I personally would not use a profile here as a resume. I use this profile for career search as a way for recruiters to search and a lead to want to get my resume. Other than that it is to connect with people in the career field and/or organization I am targeting. Making connection within a company are great ways to get looked at even if there is not a posted position.
If you start a LinkedIn profile send me a request to connect: www.linkedin.com/in/rmartinelli1/
Semper Fi
Ray Martinelli
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